An article by Ben Schmitt in the Detroit Free Press today, while intriguing, has a terrible kicker.
Here's the link:
http://www.freep.com/apps/pbcs.dll/article?AID=/20071129/NEWS02/71129045/1118/RSS
Daniel Sorenson, 26, of River Rouge, was stabbed and decapitated on November 7th. Jean Pierre Orlewicz and Alexander Letkemann, 17 and 18, of Plymouth and Westland, have been charged with the murder.
Wayne County Prosecutor Kym Worthy has made a public statement about the case, calling it a "thrill kill."
Judge Michael Gerou has since issued a gag order relating to character witnesses on both sides. Letkemann's father and attorney have argued that this is unfair, but the victim's mother is in favor of it.
Although the rest of the article is concise and well-written, the kicker is lacking. It was a great quote, so I understand why Schmitt wanted to use a quote kicker, but he could have set it up better. Here's the kicker: "When asked what Sorensen would say to the parents of the suspects, she said, 'God be with you. We're all suffering here.'"
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4 comments:
Wow...you were right, interesting but the kicker makes we want to vomit. I think MY first kicker was better than that.
That kicker is a bit unsettling. Articles like these are always to sad to read that they have to be careful with how they end.
Still, that quote's disconnected from the general flow of the writing. Seems like the writer couldn't find anywhere else to put that quote.
i definitely agree with paul haha. i also think that the kicker seemed to be just tacked on the end there, and kara's definitely right about how articles about sad topics like this have to pay extra attention to how they end.
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