The Detroit Free Press ran an obituary on Friday, October 12, for Madeleine Thompson, an English teacher at Ann Arbor Huron High School. She was 66 and died of aortic dissection.
This obituary is really well structured. It goes from the lede right into the highlights and narrative before discussing survivors and services.
Most of it is well-written, too. It is succinct and to the point throughout most of the body. The lede seems poorly done, however. It might have been re-worded: "The decision to retire from teaching last spring wasn't an easy one for Madeleine Thompson. When the popular English and humanities teacher announced her retirement, it was met with..." The last sentence could even have been broken up, since it's very long.
Link to the obituary:
http://www.freep.com/apps/pbcs.dll/article?AID=/20071012/NEWS08/710120428/1010&GID=uFmrQ4azsJUUIexFvmWR6ZO0MoQn+Y35FNBY0fxJ30I%3D
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1 comment:
I definitely agree with you about the lede - the one in the article seemed awkward, I liked yours a lot better! =)
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